Show not Tell

Slytherin and Ravenclaw writing groups are learning how to show not tell in our writing. These are our practice sentences. See if you can guess what we are feeling....

Name	Show not tell….
Penny	My mouth is moving like I want to say something but I can't. I  can't wait till we land my Dad will be happy to see me ! I look through the window to see if we are there yet but we have still
savana	My tummy feels like I'm going to puke. I look around to see if I can see mum but I can't.
ollie	I hope we land soon because I am getting butterflies in tummy I can feel them fluttering around. I need a vomiting bag NOW!!! Finally the
Sam	My heart is pounding. No one was around me that I know . I was by myself I am FREAKING OUT!!!
Harry	My eyes are watery and my head is down. I am crossing my arms and I am looking around for

Name	Show not tell….
Cate	I smiled as I was biking on the footpath. My hands were shaking as I peddled away. My cheeks went red.
Gemma	My face lit up, my cheeks were red. Some tears come through my eyes as I peddled away.
Jake	My face with beginning to turn into a big grin. As I was walking I didn't feel to good.
Cam	I was smiling because I found a bigger hamlet. I didn't have a big enough helmet and I didn't like it.
Ben	As my legs were pushing the pedals my legs were pushing the pedals slowerer. My face was going red